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Son of a Pitch: Query Round!

Hey all!

So after my success with PitchWars (one mentor liked my query and first chapter enough to request the full manuscript!), I've decided it's time to start putting All It Takes out there for the world to see, in the form of querying and entering pitch contests etc.

The first of which is Son of A Pitch, hosted by CQ author Katie Hamstead! The first round calls for entrants to post their query and first 250 words for peer critiquing.

Here's mine for anyone who has time to critique it, and I'll be off visiting the other entrants!

Title: All It Takes

Category and Genre: Adult, contemporary romance

Word Count: 120,000

Query: 

In ALL IT TALES university student Megan Green finds herself pregnant after a rare one-night-stand with womanizing cage fighter Kian Murphy.

Still trying to get her head around the unplanned changes to her life, Megan has to deal with Kian’s demands for a paternity test. She takes his request as a personal insult, causing a gulf between them.

After Kian blows up at an interviewer on live TV, Megan is left questioning if he’s really the type of person she wants to raise a child with. Spiraling out of control, Kian returns to old bad habits of drinking and lashing out; landing himself in hospital.

Faced with the possibility of losing Kian, Megan admits her feelings for him. But Kian, who has just agreed to return to therapy for his anger issues, insists he’ll only end up hurting her.

When the stress of graduating and looking for a new job cause complications in the pregnancy, and Megan is admitted to hospital, Kian realizes he can’t keep pushing her away.

As the baby’s due date approaches, and their feelings for each other grow, Megan and Kian are left questioning what the future holds.

ALL IT TAKES is a dual-POV adult, contemporary romance about responsibility, love and self-discovery that is rooted in my personal experience of becoming pregnant in my early twenties; complete at 120,000 words.

First 250 Words:

 “Come on, Meg. It’s almost Christmas. If that isn’t cause for celebration I don’t know what is.” My best friend Stacey looked up at me from behind long lashes, her baby blues pleading with me. The puppy dog eyes worked on men without fail, but I’d known her for eleven years. Her charms had no power over me.

Still, the lure of a night of drinking and dancing couldn’t be ignored. We’d been slaving away at uni for months. We deserved a night out.

“All right, but let’s not make it a late one, okay? I’ve got work in the morning.”

“We’ll go to O’Neil’s. There’s a band playing; it’ll be fun.”

“Oh no, not O’Neil’s. That place is a dive.”

“I like it.” Stacey pouted. Another trick she used to get her own way. I could see why men found it adorable, and I knew men were exactly what she had in mind.

“You only want to go there because it’s where all the gym junkies hang out, and you’re hoping to snare one.”

“Have you seen some of the guys that go there? There’s this one, Josh Browne, he’s an MMA fighter and OH.MY.GOD. You should see his body.”

I laughed and shook my head. I could appreciate a hot body as much as the next girl. Hell, I’d been charmed by a pair of biceps and a few well-placed tattoos in the past.


“Okay, we’ll go to O’Neil’s. You can pull a fighter, and everyone will be happy.”

The Best BAD Query Contest 2015


Happy Monday, Folks! I'm here for Sharon Bayliss' second annual Bad Query Contest

Here is how to play:

1) Sign up on the linky list
2) On 6/1/15, Post your TERRIBLE query and 35 word pitch on your blog (or however many words you feel like...no need to follow guidelines here). If you wish, also tweet your pitch with the #bestbadpitch tag.
3) Read the other entries and come back here to vote for the worst!

The winner will get a $25 Amazon gift card and the honor of sucking it up the most in 2015! 

This contest is all about FUN! It's not about being mean to anyone, including yourself! So that means no real queries or pitches and no basing your query or pitch on a real book or author. You must write a query and pitch from scratch using all your backwards creative juices to make it a real stinker.

Dearest esteemed publishers,

Greetings. It's Joe Bloggs here. You may remember I queried The Quest of the Orphan Boy last year. 
It's okay that you rejected that story, and I'm sorry I pooped on your lawn. I cleared it up, and made you cookies. *cookies smell suspiciously of poop*.

I have an even better story for you this year, that's guaranteed to make you millions, and be turned into a Box Office hit in Hollywood.

Lori is a sad panda. All she wants is to find a nice mate, but all the other pandas thing she's over-weight. 

Lori the panda considers liposuction, but then her best friend Hillary the Marine Turtle says you shouldn't change for any man.

Just when Lori is beginning to think she'll never find love, in walks Enrique and turns her world upside down.

Tall, dark, handsome and mysterious, Enrique is every girl panda's dream. But something about the brooding Enrique doesn't add up. When they first meet, he tells Lori he's an astronaut, but after their first date, he mentions he's a spy for the secret service.

Who is Enrique? Lori needs to find out soon, because she's fast falling for the enigmatic Enrique, and her heart can't hold on any longer. 

But then tragedy strikes. Poor Hillary is hit by a falling meteor, and in the aftermath, it's revealed Enrique isn't an astronaut or a spy. He isn't even a panda!

He was an American black bear who'd painted white stripes on himself.

Lori's world is in turmoil. She's lost her best friend in a freak accident, and the man she loves is an impostor. 

One night, Hillary's spirit comes to Lori in a dream, and tells her she can't give up on love. 

Will Lori reconcile with Enrique even though he lied to her?

DON'T LET A METEOR RUIN YOUR LIFE is an erotic, romance, mystery, complete at 145,678 words.

It will appeal to both fans of SEX AND THE CITY and THE DISCOVERY CHANNEL.

Don't miss this golden opportunity to sign the next big thing.

Yours Sincerely,

Joe Bloggs,

P.S. - This time, I haven't even designed my own cover, because I know your guys will do it much better. I did however hire a professional editor. My friend Pete, who's been writing for the local newspaper for twenty years. Pete is a legend.


PITCH: Will Lori the Panda every find love? Or will tradegy ensure she's forever alone? Find out in DON'T LET A METEOR RUIN YOUR LIFE; an erotic, romance, mystery, that will appeal to both fans of SEX AND THE CITY and THE DISCOVERY CHANNEL.

Sharon Bayliss' Bad Query Contest


There are lots of query contests out there looking for GOOD queries, but Sharon Bayliss is offering something different.

On June 10th, Sharon will be looking for the worst of the worst.

Here is how it will work: 

1) On June 10th, write the worst query you can and post it on your blog.

2) Hop around to the other blogs and take in all the horribleness.

3) On 6/10-6/13, visit www.sharonbayliss.com to vote for your favorite BAD query.

The query with the most votes will win a $25 Amazon gift card and the glory of knowing you're the worst of the worst.

 The idea is to write a fictional query highlighting bad query qualities, not to showcase actual bad queries! The contest is an opportunity to have fun, make each other laugh, and get all the bad query writing out of our system. Anyone who pokes fun at an actual author or book will be disqualified.

Sign up here!